Project Revision

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Editing Challenge 1 
Answering the Question with a clear, Debatable Thesis
I chose this one because looking back at my project I don't have a defined thesis. I know I could change things by looking back at the initial prompt. 
Paragraph Development
Again, going back to the thesis, I feel like it can be stronger and each paragraph can be stronger once I define my true thesis. 
Make a point, Don't summarize
I chose this one because I see I did summarize probably more than I needed too. I know I should assume that my reader will know the plot of the story. 

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