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Weekly Review: Essays are Coming (Extra Credit)
Weekly Review The reading for me went great this week. I really enjoyed both of the readings. Tartuffe was probably my favorite because it had a lot of drama, which is so fun for me. I did like The Song of Ch’un-Hyang but it made me a sad when she was beaten so badly. I loved Ch’un-Hyangs passion though; the love for her husband was unconditional. They never made me feel bored or felt like it was dragging on which is always good! I’m sure all the readings will interest me. My best writing this week was probably in this class with my reading notes. I took a lot of time to make sure my notes were nicely written so I would be able to look at them in the future and be able to understand the reading. A good strategy for me is to pause in the reading and take notes as I go along, so I know exactly what I was thinking in that moment. And how my feelings change throughout the story. A lot of peoples work has been standing out to me, we have a lot of great writers in t...
Hi Megan,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your first project submission! You gave some awesome insights and are off to a great start. I really liked the way you laid out the one theme—love, and then looked at the theme from two different author’s stories and two different uses of the theme. Your insight into manipulative love was very interesting. It’s something that I believe still happens very often today and has always been a risk when caring about someone deeply. Loving someone means you are being vulnerable and trusting them not to take advantage—although that’s not always the case. Your consideration of the time period was great as well. Regarding the mistreatment of women in this story, such as treating Dorine poorly, and forcing an unwanted marriage on Mariane, I wonder if this was a sign of the times or if it was a reflection of Moliere’s view about women. My thought would be that it may be a combination of both. Again, great job overall!
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ReplyDeleteI really like your selection of work and the way you chose to compare them. I agree that Tartuffe’s love is a form of manipulation. He had Orgon convinced that he was a holy and righteous man that would never do Orgon wrong. He was always so concerned about Tartuffe that he ignored his wife and families’ worries about Tartuffe and his intentions. Tartuffe was very good at manipulating Orgon and you did a great job of pointing that out. I like how you compared it to The Song of Ch’un-Hyang and you gave great examples of why their love was pure and unselfish. Even Though the governor had her beaten she did not give into his orders because she believed her love would come back to her. One thing I did notice in your writing and I do the same thing is you say “I believe” and “my opinion” I had someone tell me that when you are writing something you don’t need to say that because the whole thing is your opinion. I think you did a great job with this!
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ReplyDeleteI enjoyed that you pretty much laid out the main point that you were going to talk about in each of the paragraphs because it got me ready for what the topic you are about discuss and what I was about to be thinking about. I think you had a great contextual evidence and you did a great job incorporating the literature and quotes from it into your project. Your project also answers your main question pretty good I think. I could not really find anything wrong or you needed to fix I think if you had more of a structure to your project it would have a better follow and made the evidence you are using stand out more. Also maybe in your first paragraph, you can tell us how your project is going to be laid out. Overall, you did a good job on the first project! I enjoyed reading it.
Hi Megan, Great job on your first project ! You gave some awesome insights and you are off to a great start. I really liked the way you laid out the one theme—love, and then looked at the theme from two different author’s stories and two different uses of the theme. You also had a great solid thesis with a great intro. Like Kaytee said, you dont have to use "I believe" or "In my opinion" because like she said this whole project is your opinion!! Overall you did a good job on your project! I enjoy reading it!!
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your analysis. I like the way you examined how the theme of love was handled in both Tartuffe and The Song of Ch’un-hyang, I think you brought up some really intriguing points. I think the way you set up your analysis helped to provide a logical way to see the points you wanted to make, you did a good job of first explaining how you viewed the different types of love in each story and why you saw them this way and then explaining how they had similarities to each other but also dissimilarities. I would have liked to have seen more quotes from within each story to back up what you were saying, though. You gave good examples of where in the story you saw specific types of love being represented and how you interpreted them, but I think providing the actual words or descriptions used within the story for these examples would have really helped give much more of a visualization of what you were referring to for your readers. Overall, I think you did well on this project and I liked the topic that you chose to discuss.
Hi Megan!! First of all, I loved your initial topic. Love really is a consistency between these two pieces and I think it’s really admirable and really great that you saw that. It’s very insightful and beautiful. I love that you also laid out what you were doing at the very beginning, so I kind of knew what I needed to be thinking about going into this project. One thing that I think you could do to improve it would be to have a more specific thing that you focus on. I was a little confused at which prompt you were using because at first I thought you were using the prompt about comparing two works of literature, but then I thought you were just doing the theme that you see throughout the literature. I think that your project was already great, but I would love to see more focused on one or the other. I think I would lean towards the love one because you seem much more passionate and understanding of that. I love how enthusiastic you were, and I can’t wait to read more from you!! Great work.
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ReplyDeleteSo we meet again, Good to see you in another class!
Firstly I would like to point out how I enjoyed your idea of Love ruling the plots and how you showed the different ways that love can take shape and shape a story. I liked that you used two very different stories, from two different times and cultures but were able to link the two anyway. I would have liked to have seen more citation in the text since you referenced Tartuffe many times initially, yet there wasn't any page numbers present till later.
I really loved your idea of "This reading used love in both a way of hate and loyalty. " and I think you could have written a whole paper on that idea alone. It is quite a profound statement and very beautifully said.
Some of your thoughts seemed fragmented or brief. I think you could expand on some of your points and omit others to make it flow a little easier.
Overall very well done!
Hi Megan, I have to say you did a magnificent job on your project. Your introduction is precise about what you are going to talk about, and from what I understand your thesis is first and second sentence. It is great that you are going to talk about the way love is portrayed in both texts that you chose, and you immediately give examples of their similarities and differences. You have quite a bit of evidence supporting your statements which is really good, but I do suggest that your marriage paragraph needs to be revised a bit since it is awkwardly placed there. Another paragraph that seems a little irrelevant would be the time period one because it doesn't support or connect with your argument on love, though that is just my opinion. However the rest of your paragraphs are very good, and are concise and clear as to what you are trying to say and keep in line with your discussion. You did a good job.
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ReplyDeleteYour project was great to read! I wrote my project on Tartuffe - so it was great to see you write about it, as well, and compare it to another work we've read. You are definitely right that both Tartuffe and Ch'un-Hyang have the similar theme of love. I noticed, and very much agree with you, that Orgon's love for Tartuffe was undeniable and very obviously, and unlike a love he has for anyone else in the story. I also wrote how when Orgon came home, Dorine filled him in how what was going on and that all Orgon was concerned about was Tartuffe. I also liked your take on Ch'un-Hyang and the purity in the story. If anything, I would maybe like to see bit more usage of quotes (I know you have a few), but maybe quotes that are a little longer. Or if you use short quotes, maybe add another, somewhat longer quote, too. Otherwise it was great to read!
Hey Megan,
ReplyDeleteYour project was well put together and I can see that the story of Tartuffe really connected with you since your analysis is so clear. The theme of love is great to use in this instance because Tartuffe love as manipulation creates a new conversation because I heard theme's of him being a trickster but not going deep into what was he using to trick people and Orgon was one of those people. Also I enjoy the story you used to compare Tartuffe with since The Song of Ch'Un-Hyang was a story I used in my project but also because this story was the greatest example of love in our readings in may opinion. Also not a lot of people remembered to use two stories and you did it so well great job. And even though Tartuffe was a difficult to understand you made my understanding that much clearer from reading your submission.
Hello Megan, nice work on the project. I enjoyed reading your project and I think the quotes you used went well with your project. I also think the character commparrison you did was accurate because it shows that one character in each story had a power grip on the other. I agree both stories although were different both shared the theme of love and again because of the character comparrisson it helped nicely tie into your arguement. I also wan to add that I thought it was a nice touch to add how the author's created their story in comparrison to one another Overall great job I didn't see anything that didn't look like it fit. Everything you included went well with the arguement while it also made it easy to follow along. Good work on the project Megan I llok forwrd to reading future submissions of your projects, Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteHi Megan! I just read your project submission and it was an enjoyable read. I like that you decided to choose two character in two different stories and one theme in the those two stories. By choosing both, you elaborated upon the characters and how those theme worked in the readings and those characters lives. It gave more insight. I also like that you gave your opinion quite clearly throughout the project submission. it made it easier to understand what your opinion was, like that the characters use love to their advantage, which I absolutely agree with. However, maybe you could have explained your claims a bit more and provided a little more evidence to back up your claims. Besides that, you did an amazing job at giving your opinion about love and the characters in your project submission. I enjoyed reading your take on love in the Song of Ch'un-hyang and Tartuffe. Great job and keep up the good work!
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ReplyDeleteI also selected Tartuffe as a book to compare. I find that there are many different elements to the work. He was very manipulative and Orgon was very hypocritical of those around him. He said that they did not understand when they understood the real situation better than he did. I like how you said that love was the biggest factor in the story because it is what finally made Orgon see Tartuffe for the liar he is. The people in Tartuffe seem very selfish to me whereas in The Song if Ch’un-Hyang their love is pure, like you state. There are no other motivations other than they want to be together. I like that you draw attention to the parallels of Tartuffe controlling Orgon to the governor controlling Ch’un-Hyang. Their motivations are different yet they go about getting results in the same way. I really liked reading you project submission and look forward to reading more of your work.
Hi Megan! I thought your choice of stories for your anthology were very interesting an well thought out. I could easily see the theme you were going for, and felt like it would be make for a very cohesive curriculum. Your students would be able to compare and contrast works easily, and be able to get very detailed in their analyses. Also, the fact that they are from a similar time period means you can really explore the context of that time period, and what impact it had on the various authors and their work. You point this out in your essay, and I think that it's one of your strongest points that you might still be able to expand upon a little more if you wanted to.
ReplyDeleteSince we can't get out of doing revisions, I'd put in a little more explanation of why you think the themes you explore in your curriculum are important to learn about. You say they are important in a few sentences, but only vaguely say why that is. Other than that, your essay is really detailed, and your choices made a lot of sense. Hope this helps!
Hi there, Megan! Great job with your project! I think having the prompt you chose there helped me have a focused perception on how to read your piece. However, I think that your project could do without it! I think that you have a very focused idea of what you’re trying to share. I think the anthology is an incredible idea! But I think the prompt can be revealed through your clear ideas and that explanation does not need to be there. Also fixing your formatting into an MLA essay format would also help clarify your project even more. There was some unnecessary spacing between your topic sentences and the rest of your body paragraphs that could just be pushed together to separate those ideas that work together nicely. Overall, you did an incredible job!! I think you provided a unique idea and you had a very clear idea for a tough prompt. I cannot wait to read more from you.
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ReplyDeleteYour project was truly different where everyone usually does the essay style you read deeper into the topics we were able to choose from and find one that interest me just by the flexibility it gives you as a writer. I appreciate the prompt just because it helps me understand which project topic you were writing on and I don't know about anyone else but it was helpful especially since other students read your work it is helpful to understand clearly the topic you chose. The only criticism I have on the essay is you have great point on why these text were important in reading so having more analysis to back up your arguments are important and if you do more of that you essay will truly be set apart from the rest. Finally my favorite author to read out of the ones you posted would have to be Ghalib and his new age poetry style was very attractive to me as a reader.
Hi Megan! I thought your project was very clear cut and to the point, I immediately understood your reasoning behind why you picked the pieces you did and what you hoped to achieve by picking them. I liked that even though your stories had a common theme, you still made it a point to identify the key ways in which they are different, and to point out how much variety is in your selection. I also liked that your anthology drew from a specific time period, meaning there could be lots of analysis drawn from the historical context surrounding the stories you chose and how this changed the author's world views and influenced their writing styles, choices, etc. My favorite author you chose is Emily Dickinson, especially the quote about death that you chose. The way she covered the taboo topic made her very unique, and I feel this is your strongest choice to put in your anthology. Great work!
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